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Chloé's peer review
Hello! Here is my peer review on your article:

I think the tone of your article is neutral, which is really good! I like the fact that you have several parts. Your sources seem trustworthy as well!

The lead section might be a little bit too long however. Most of the information would be better in the history section (I would say from "after missions" until "in the field"). Maybe you could have a new section for the founders, explain in some words who they are, that would be interesting. You should not hesitate to add links as well (for the founders, or Thales, or Vodafone for example) Also, I found the chronology of the article not so sensible. Big headtitles would help to see clearer!

Some of the things that I thought you could add, if ever you find information about it: were there any event where TSF failed in its mission? (as we had seen in class, sometimes ONG fail) could we talk about a certain biases, since TSF is fonded by the European Union Humanitarian aid and civil protection? (too focused on Europe?)

Good luck in your research and for the rest of your finals! Chloé