User talk:Ecassel/Ipas (organization)/EmmaJohn121 Peer Review

Overall impressions

Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? What are the strengths of the content added? How can the content added be improved? Overall evaluation:

I think that the content added will help a reader of the article to better understand what Ipas does as a organization, and their stance on issues related to reproductive health. It is definitely an improvement and an expansion on the previous entry to the page. I think the strengths of this entry would be its comprehensive understanding of the beliefs and efforts of Ipas, and generally the fact that it offers a more in-depth look at the organization that the original article did not include. I think it would benefit the authors of this article to check over the spelling/grammar/punctuation, particularly in the Ipas Strategies and Areas of Focus sections, there appears to be a few things worded awkwardly, or capitalized unnecessarily. Additionally, I think that the format of these two sections could be improved on, I had a difficult time reading through the list format--perhaps you could try a paragraph format, or a format with less headings. Overall, I think that the information provided was important and necessary to a wikipedia page about any given organization, and most of the corrections are superficial in order to make it read a little easier.

EmmaJohn121 (talk) 23:27, 18 November 2019 (UTC)