User talk:Edavis95

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Hello, Edavis95, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Really nice work on your article draft. The only thing that could be improved in the lead section - the lead should present an overview of the main points of what's covered in the article. The current lead - which I realize was there before you started working on the article - is rather inadequate. Improving it would substantially improve things for the average reader, especially since that's all that Google pulls from the article for its summary (and many people never read past that). Thanks. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 04:04, 10 April 2016 (UTC)