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Peer Edits my edits are in parenthesises
Amna Mahmoud Al-Jaida section-

Education was spread among girls in Qatar through her, where she taught women to go to their homes -sentence unclear

Then, in 1938, she opened a school in her home, and the number of her students was approximately 60. (how about change to In 1938, ..... )

At the beginning, (change to "In the beginning")

Mahmoud Youssef emphasized the value of education for both males and (females) since he thought it set kids on the right path. He instilled and reinforced this belief (on) his daughter,

also throughout the article variations of the spelling of her last name is present, is it jaida, jaydah, or jaidah?

Contributions to Qatari Women's Education
Amna Mahmoud was an influential figure in the struggle for female education in Qatar. She (is) also well-known in Qatar for advocating women empowerment (in order for them) to take (important) roles (and aid) in the country's growth.

As the number of students increased in the school and reached 100, she was able to persuade a number of parents to enroll their female children and have them educated. [3]
 * In 1954, Amna Mahmoud’s book was selected as (a part of the curriculum material) (for) the first primary school for girls in Qatar.
 * Amna Mahmoud (was also) the first Qatari female teacher in the first Qatari school for girls.
 * She also contributed to the establishment of (girl) schools in Al Wakrah and Al Khor.

Zain Fanik (talk) 11:35, 18 August 2022 (UTC)

Peer Edits my edits are in parenthesises
in the Contributions to Qatari Women's Education write this instead

(Amna's efforts on behalf of girls' education in Qatar eventually led to the beginning of a slow process to secure official support. She recognized and acknowledged that women's education would progress slower than men's education.)

Amna Mahmoud hoped that Qatar would surpass some of the education(al) advances that had already taken place in the neighboring Arabian Gulf states of Bahrain and Kuwait.

in the legacy section dont add this: Perhaps, Amna herself dreamed of attending such school one day to get an education. because it sounds opinionated and you cant add your own thoughts Zain Fanik (talk) 11:46, 18 August 2022 (UTC)