User talk:Edixon426/Great white shark

Dan's review
Ted, this is a really cool local addition to further improve what's already a pretty robust Wikipedia article on the great white shark. You've chosen a strong array of reliable sources and helpfully cited everything that you've included in the article. A few little suggestions as you revise:
 * In your first sentence, I don't think you need to link to the great whites wiki article (since the reader will already be there), and -- judging by the existing article -- I think great white shark should be lowercase.


 * This probably isn't the biggest deal, but I might delete "unfortunately" in your last sentence. I mean, it is unfortunate that we don't have more knowledge, but Wikipedia articles generally refrain from that sort of value judgment, you know?
 * The Boston Globe articles don't seem to play well with Wikipedia's citation generator. (See how it says "Comments, 11:53 a m Email to a Friend Share on Facebook Share on TwitterPrint this Article View" -- that probably means it's pulling from the wrong page on the website for the title. You might need to manually change that.)

Overall, though, great research, and I think that this will end up being a solid contribution to this Wikipedia article. Daniel.messier (talk) 11:52, 8 August 2019 (UTC)
 * I wonder as well about where in the existing article you've chosen to insert your paragraph. It seems that the surrounding paragraphs are about how sharks attack, whereas yours is more about how sharks attack. I wonder if yours might be a better fit toward the end of that section.