User talk:Eec34

Sport and society post. Rekjlhoya (talk) 15:19, 1 February 2012 (UTC)

"My Research Project:the jock culture of collegiate lacrosse and its relation to scandals" I will probably be using these articles

"The Duke Lacrosse Case" http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Duke_lacrosse_case "Murder of Yardley love" http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yeardley_Love "Sociology of Sport" http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sociology_of_sport

Thoughts on your sandbox work
Hi there, just replying to your question to Buggie in case he is unable to. I looked over your draft, and overall, nice job! Your citations are notable, varied, and well-spaced-- excellent!! And your presentation of two viewpoints in "Controversy" is great, though I might change the "directly refute" language since Chandler is not saying the direct opposite of Curry. Also, you might consider calling it something a little more specific, link "Controversy over contributing factors" or something.

A few specific suggestions for change:
 * If you use a word to qualify a claim, be sure it is either common knowledge or citable. In other words, is "now" the right word for your first sentence?  It suggests this is a new concern.  If it's not a new concern, you might want to state that, or else delete "now" altogether.
 * Avoid using relative time since your edit may last years. Instead of "recent UVA lacrosse murder," say "2011 murder of UVA student and lacrosse player Yeardley Love," and link that (using the chain link icon) to the Wikipedia article on the murder, http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Murder_of_Yeardley_Love.
 * Studies suggest, surveys now show = good!
 * You don't have to say "studies suggest the hypothesis that"-- you can just say "studies suggest that"
 * The point cited by [4] may be a little unclear. Reword.  Do male students represent 3.3% of the population?  Maybe "surveys now show that 3.3% of the male student athlete population commit 19%"?  Verify with survey.
 * I'd change the St. John's quote to just a citation; restate in your own words, and specify the year, but keep the citation.

Hope that helps! Sleuthwood (talk) 16:08, 15 March 2012 (UTC)

comments on sandbox
Hi!

I've left comments on the talk page of your sandbox. You can find them at User talk:Eec34/sandbox. Dkreisst (talk) 20:04, 15 March 2012 (UTC)

comments on your article
Hey,

Most of my comments are in a Word document that I will send to you as soon as I write this but I'll just say a few things here. Your article is off to a good start. Reading it gets me intrigued in the topic that the public here's about a few years at a time. You bring a lot of prospective in and bring its seriousness to light. You are well on your way to having a great paper! Onlybecauseihaveto (talk) 02:16, 4 April 2012 (UTC)

Talk page procedures
Hi Eec34,

I moved the edit you made the talk page of the article Violence against women to the bottom of the page and added a section header. Though you chose a section that was perfect, "Missing topics", if you want to catch editors' attention, you should start your own section and place it at the bottom of a talk page. Also, be sure to sign your edits on talk pages with four tildes. Dkreisst (talk) 20:45, 23 April 2012 (UTC)

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Re: article in sandbox
Hi ! This is a student from a sport and society class. I recently made a draft of edits I want to add to the page violence against women. (it can be found in my sandbox!) I am just nervous that I didn't follow wiki norms for citations. Is there any way you could take a quick look? I don't know how to use the same citation over and over. THANKS! Eec34 (talk) 14:15, 14 March 2012 (UTC)

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