User talk:Eg2619

Welcome!
Hello, Eg2619, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

I hope you enjoy editing here. If you haven't already done so, please check out the student training library, which introduces you to editing and Wikipedia's core principles. You may also want to check out the Teahouse, a community of Wikipedia editors dedicated to helping new users. Below are some resources to help you get started editing. If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:53, 13 February 2024 (UTC)

Your draft
I returned your draft to your sandbox because it isn't ready for mainspace. Please have a look at pages 7-9 of the Editing Wikipedia brochure that I've attached.

Some obvious issues include the fact that your article lacks a lead section that summarized all the main points of the article in a way that's proportional to the coverage in the article body.

You don't use sections, and your paragraphs are too long to be easily read. You should start each paragraph with the main take-home point, and use the rest of the article to provide more details. But you should write with the assumption that no one is going to read past the first sentence, and focus on giving them as much value as you can right at the start.

More generally, for a medical article you should follow the the style guide for medical-related articles. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 03:12, 4 May 2024 (UTC)


 * I returned your draft to your sandbox because it's still not ready for mainspace. As a medical article, the standards are higher than for most other topics, but even without that requirement, you still haven't followed the recommendations I made here. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 15:38, 13 May 2024 (UTC)