User talk:Egeorge01/sandbox

Looks good overall, but needs citations and references. Consider adding to the treatment section of the article or a line on how the condition is medically managed.--Nskumar01 (talk) 15:26, 15 November 2019 (UTC)

Edgar,

I enjoyed reading your wiki article rough draft on Donohue syndrome (Leprechaunism). I thought your abstract was super informative. I found it interesting that the disease is caused by a mutation in the INSR gene, which as I learned from your article, contains the genetic information for the formation of insulin receptors. I think your wiki article is very neat and appealing to eye. You did a great job covering every topic (e.g. Signs and symptoms, cause, pathophysiology, and diagnosis). After reading your article, I’m sure the treatment of the disease depends on the specific symptoms that are apparent in each individual. If I had to add anything, I would just touch base on the treatments of leprechaunism, whether it be standard therapies, or investigational therapies, or maybe there is not treatment available at all. I think adding to the “treatment” section would be beneficial for your readers in understanding Leprechaunism as a whole. Overall I think you did a great job, Edgar! I enjoyed reading your rough draft on Donohue syndrome and look forward to reading your final product. Jolivia03 (talk) 17:10, 20 November 2019 (UTC)

--Sweiner02 (talk) 23:16, 1 December 2019 (UTC)
 * You have more information on prognosis in pathophysiology than in prognosis.
 * Treatment could use some more explanation of what this can involve and look like.
 * Don't prescribe what future research should do unless you are citing a specific source saying that, in which case you should make that very clear. Focus on what is happening or has recently been done.
 * Could use more linking to other wikipedia articles, especially in the later half of the abstract.
 * The abstract is a good, clear summary. I really appreciate your expansion of that.