User talk:Egonz124/sandbox

What article did you evaluate for Exercise 2? Jlehrcalpoly (talk) 16:43, 4 October 2018 (UTC)

Peer Feedback (John Kimura)
Positive: Good job clearing up that confusing typo in the first paragraph. Also, good job searching for scholarly articles first, though it's a shame nothing came up. Constructive: I might include something about her work in diversifying STEM in the introduction section. It'd also be pretty easy to include a section that's just a list of all the papers she's written with links to each. You appear to have already found two, and any more she's written shouldn't be too hard to find with Google Scholar or the like. Most Important: I think the media coverage page can be expanded a little. Each source has about a sentence written on it, and if you look at each source you could probably find a little more to pull out of it. It's also not totally clear what's meant by the "Steven P. Jobs Trust article" sentence in that section

Peer review (Megan J) I like that you pasted in the original article to work from. Also there are clear goals written out which all seem like feasible and productive goals. The copyedits that have been done already made the article seem more put together and serious. Just keep researching and adding to what you already have. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Meganjage (talk • contribs) 00:35, 9 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer review replies: 1. Thank you for providing ideas, quite honestly I didn't quite know how approach the edits, but I will work on your suggestions, I think that would be a solid start. I also want to make a section with what her concepts her papers convey, but I'm no physics major so that might be quite difficult. She has quite a significant presence in the media as she's regarded as the next Einstein. I was initially looking at just Cal Poly's database, but I think Google Scholar could also be a nice resource. 2. Thank you for your input, I am trying to expand it fivefold but I'm not quite sure what sources to pull from that are Wikipedia approved. I want to try restructure the article, to help it flow better.