User talk:Ehong25/Headshaking

Peer review of article Headshaking by user ESE98
Lead evaluation Overall, the lead is concise and very well defines the discussed topic. In my opinion, the information provided in the lead makes the article’s topic instantly appealing to the reader. Moreover, all the information that is introduced in the lead are being further discussed in the subsequent sections. However, the lead does not draw the attention to all the sections that are later discussed in the article. Content evaluation Overall, the content of the article is adequate to understand the headshaking behavior, its causes, and potential treatments. I found that all the discussed information was relevant, and necessary, to the topic discussion. The table discussing the non-neurological causes of the behavior is concise and provides the reader with a wide range of causes that might trigger the syndrome in horses. All the presented information is, indeed, up to date as the resources it was drawn form did not precede year 2001. However, the content lacks elaborating on the effects of the headshaking behavior on the health and overall life quality of the animal. Tone and balance evaluation Information is discussed in an unbiased manner. A wide variety of different explanations (i.e. causes) as to why the headshaking behavior is observed in horses has been equally presented with an unbiased elaboration on the neurological causes of the behavior. Sources and references evaluation All the information presented in the article’s draft is drawn from peer-reviewed journal articles which ensures that the information is credible and reliable. Moreover, the resources are – as mentioned earlier – up to date which ensures that the discussed information in not outdated or undermined. Organization evaluation There are a few, minor grammatical errors observed in the article’s draft; however, they do not result in any obvious ambiguity. The discussed sections are generally of appropriate lengths, pertaining to the importance of each section to the topic discussion. The order in which the sections were constructed in is logical, making it easier for the reader to follow. Overall, the draft is well-written and very well organized! Images and media evaluation The draft currently lacks images and media files. Adding visual representations of the headshaking behavior, trigeminal nerve, nose nets, and face masks might be more engaging to the reader. Overall evaluation Overall, nice work! Your work has definitely improved the overall quality of the article. The article’s draft is concise and manages to elaborate on different aspects of the topic. The presented information is well-referenced, and all the sources are reliable and up to date which further emphasizes the credibility of the discussed information. There are some questions whose answers might be interesting to add to the article – if they are discussed in reliable resources: Is the headshaking behavior impairing the life of the horse in any way? Do horses with this syndrome die younger than their conspecifics that do not display the same behavior? Does the behavior affect the lifestyle or the reproductive success of the animal? ESE98 (talk) 19:37, 2 November 2019 (UTC)

Peer review of Headshaking by user Emilyd1997
Hello! My review of your article draft can be found here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ehong25/Headshaking/Emilyd1997_Peer_Review Emilyd1997 (talk) 23:38, 3 November 2019 (UTC)