User talk:Eisherfinski/sandbox

Overall, this is a great article. The disease is well explained and you mention exactly what ATPase and SERCA1 control and how having BD effects these two things in terms the average person can understand. I would consider making separate paragraphs under diagnosis when you start talking about Electromyography and Genetic testing, purely for the purpose of how the article is laid out. I would further explain what dantrolene and verapamil do under treatment. You explain that they block calcium channels ; but what does that actually do to the muscles? Also, make sure you add in a reference section, currently all of the sources are linked under treatment.

Klshetler (talk) 18:10, 15 September 2018 (UTC)Klshetler

The research is done very well and you stated exactly what is causing the syndrome and how this occurs. Very good. The only things that may need changed are organization of sentences. In the beginning it is important who discovered the disorder but you may want to incorporate an entirely new section titled 'Discovery' and include those details there. I agree with Shetler in that the treatment could use further elaboration to match the rest of the article. Well done and I look forward to seeing the changes. Zach S. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Znsherman (talk • contribs) 20:04, 16 September 2018 (UTC)

Great work on the topic of choice. The flow of the article made it easy for readers to follow through. I would add more information on the function of sarcoplasmic reticulum and how does that relate to the levels of calcium ions and symptoms of BD. Overall, I thought the article was both interesting and informative.SukLanSer (talk) 13:36, 21 September 2018 (UTC)