User talk:Ejohnson1212/Ederyn Williams/Sandcastle365 Peer Review

Hi Erin,

I really was impressed by how you were able to identify the need and value in adding the Social Presence Theory section. In terms of the sequence and flow of the article, it fits right in and provides relevant content. Your contribution provides an added layer of insight into Ederyn Williams. You were able to concisely expound on this important theory developed by Williams without confusing readers or pulling away from the topic. Your references for the added section were also cited. In reviewing your editing history, I was pleased to see that you recognized that there were some incorrect citations and removing them. You also indicated that you removed an irrelevant references list- that's good. Doing so would reduce any unnecessary confusion of information overload on the topic. Overall, I feel that your article edit was well done. Ad Professor Haynes has indicated, it is about the quality and not the quantity. You added section was a great quality edit. I only have one suggestion and that would be to add a picture. I know that it is difficult to find fair use pictures for Wikipedia, I tried to add pictures to my article and they were all in violation and had to be removed. If there was an authorized image Ederyn Williams that could be added- that would be my only suggestion. Visual components are always great to enhance an article.

Sandcastle365 (talk) 01:13, 23 February 2020 (UTC)