User talk:Elabbe17/sandbox

Lead: The purpose of the commission is clear and easily understood.

Structure:

-	The historical background is very clear. I like how you structured this section along the lines of the military coups. It makes it easy to follow. -	The first section of your “findings” paragraph seems to focus more on the mandate and what the commission did for their investigation rather than what they had found. This could be changed to “Mandate and Process” and then another paragraph could be added for findings where the section on the military coup of 1979 could be included as well as more details on what the commission found throughout their investigation. This could help break down the information for the reader and provides for a clear focus. Besides that, the article is divided well and easy to follow :) -	There are certain areas in the article where the sentences could be re-arranged so that the paragraph flows better, this is something I would look for when doing the final draft.

Balance: No apparent bias, some important sections could use more details (findings and recommendations).

Questions:

-	You provide a good explanation of the processes of the commission and the public hearings they held but is there any other information on what they find throughout their investigation besides the information on the military coup of 1979? Were there any other conclusions made? This would be interesting to include if the information is available :) -	The commission outlined in their report how reparations should be given to victims but that this is all the government and the commission did. Was this because that was the only recommendation the commission established or were there other recommendations but they were just ignored?

Overall Comment:

Your article is easy to follow and I learned a lot from it. I did not know about the conflict in Ghana before I read your article so thank you for bringing that to my attention. There are certain sections in the article that could be more detailed. It is really difficult to find sources and to have to access the reports (I’ve had this problem) of some commissions so there is the chance that this information isn’t available but it would be interesting to have more information on some of the other findings and conclusions (if there are any) of the commission as well as more information on its recommendations (If there are any). It is good to have this information to compare to other commissions. I’m interested in finding out more about this :)

Previousn unsigned comment by User:Taymcclure — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dwebsterbu (talk • contribs) 16:32, 19 November 2018 (UTC)

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Comments from User:Jazminealdrich a bit hard to see: I viewed them at https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User%3AElabbe17%2Fsandbox&type=revision&diff=867787584&oldid=866499998 Dwebsterbu (talk) 16:42, 19 November 2018 (UTC)