User talk:Elcamino67aaa/sandbox

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Trying to navigate this page. Elcamino67aaa (talk) 18:43, 19 September 2018 (UTC)

Ok, wish I could be more help, but I’m in same boat. Elcamino67aaa (talk) 18:45, 19 September 2018 (UTC)

Peer Edit
1. A lead section that is easy to understand

Although we are not writing full new articles, an introductory section can be helpful. While your first paragraph is eye-catching and relevant, it would be helpful to have a section that prefaces the rest of your article. Perhaps you can include some historical context concerning how religion, the state, or some other cultural force has set the stage for current gender relations in Uganda.

2. A clear structure

Your article is coherent and includes rich information. However, the structure could be made more clear. It appears that there are three categories of information in the article: violence, education, and interventions. Perhaps these could be grouped together with subheadings or some other structure.

3. Balanced coverage

The inclusion of the ramifications of interventions, as well as the interventions themselves, is appropriate and adds complexity to your discussion of gender in Uganda. Perhaps there could be more information concerning women's cultural roles in addition to the various interventional measures.

4. Neutral content

The first sentence of the last paragraph is perhaps too argumentative for Wikipedia. Consider wrapping up your discussion with a more neutral or objective statement.

5. Reliable sources

The sources for this article appear to be academic and reliable. However, one of the citations only provides a link to a CSULB library search. Perhaps include the full details of the source in the citation.

Great job! I look forward to reading your final article.

Charlotteaurelius (talk) 21:09, 16 October 2018 (UTC)