User talk:Eliza Mckenna/sandbox

Your page is really detailed and there is a good amount of info on Rae’s specific projects. Good points were made on Rae’s contributions to supporting black/female/minority filmmakers as well as her promoting series and films that are concerned with issues regarding how women, black individuals and black communities are treated. There are minor grammar issues and the flow of sentences could be better and more concise. I’d recommend more proof reading. The last two lines in The Sip subsection don’t appear to be cited. I believe the info is from either the 38th or 39th citation, it just needs to be moved further down to the last line. I’m not entirely sure so I won’t make any changes to that part, just something to take note of. --Marliethefilmcritic (talk) 20:18, 31 October 2018 (UTC)Marliethefilmcritic