User talk:ElliotNestor/sandbox

Peer review by Aubrey
Hi Elliot! Great work on your article so far. I really like the lead paragraph. It gives a good overview of what polymer chemistry is, what it applies to, and why we should care about the topic. One thing I would suggest changing in the lead paragraph to improve the flow is to find a way to rephrase the section in the second sentence with all of the brackets. The brackets disrupt the flow of the sentence and made the idea less clear to me.

Regarding structure, you could consider moving the history section to the top to give the article a more chronological feel. This could help give readers a better idea of the timeline of polymer research, rather than learning what we know currently first, then jumping back in time in the middle of the article. Another small note: To offer a little more structure and organization to the “classification” section, I would consider adding sub-headings for “biopolymers” and “synthetic polymers”. Then, if anyone comes to the article specifically looking for either of those two topics, they will be able to find them more easily.

For existing sections: I think the length of the “composites” section does not represent its importance. I think you could add onto the importance of polymers in composites and provide some more examples to make that section feel more thorough. Also, In the “polymers and their properties” section, there are many theories listed at the end, without any reference as to what these theories pertain to or what they hypothesize. I think it could be worthwhile to expand on this section to give the reader an idea for what some of these theories are.

I like what you’ve done with the viscosity section so far! I would make sure to find another source for that section so that it’s not all based on one source. I would recommend the second source being a textbook maybe, so that they aren’t both website-based sources. I also liked your addition of the techniques section, and I liked that you organized the techniques between biopolymers and synthetic polymers. One small detail: you write “synthetic polymers” for one header and “biopolymer synthesis” for the other, so I would recommend having the word synthesis on both of them or neither of them.

You’ve done a great job so far of keeping a neutral tone in your writing. Overall, I think it will be equally beneficial to this article for you to both add your own sections and edit and expand on existing section. Great job so far, keep up the good work! Aubrey29 (talk) 05:04, 16 February 2019 (UTC)
 * The first paragraph is messy, I agree, but the content is there, so I will revise. Will move history section. I have been trying to restructure the classification section. I feel like composites is something that should really be covered in polymer engineering, and also isn't a way to classify polymers themselves. For the polymers and their properties section, I haven't addressed it too much, and it does seem to need to some citations. The list of theories might not be necessary, but I feel like explaining too much would be redundant as all those theories have their own page. The website I used to cite for viscosity itself cites textbooks as sources. "Synthetic polymers" and "biopolymer synthesis" are bad ways to name those sections, and I've hanged them. 07:04, 2 March 2019 (UTC)  — Preceding unsigned comment added by ElliotNestor (talk • contribs)