User talk:Elluel/sandbox

Peer Review
Hello Everybody!

You guys have done a great job assessing the parts of the article that could potentially use some work. I agree that the article lacks the implications of blackmail, and the different kinds of blackmailing that occur. Furthermore, there are various citation issues that could use fixing, and I feel that you have identified those areas successfully. Lastly, I also think the source Rob found will be really useful in enhancing this article, specifically as a way of providing reliable evidence to support your claims.

As far as the areas of this article where I could see improvement, I think you guys should really consider beginning to draft the areas of the article you each plan to edit. This being said, instead of simply stating what you would change, begin to draft what those changes will actually look like. That means implementing the sources you feel the article is lacking, and providing information where the article has yet to go into depth about. As far as improving the article, you have the ideas, but in order to be successful, I think you guys really need to work on the implementation of those ideas. This all begins with creating your drafts on the specific topics you have already assigned to yourselves.

Jaimedepaola (talk) 15:44, 1 April 2018 (UTC)

Peer review- Stav
1.    The opening section of the article defines 'blackmail' thoroughly in my opinion. I also think it helps that more than one dictionary was used to formulate the first few sentences. Overall the article seems concise and seems neutral in terms of phrasing. The citations used check out as far as I can tell and seem to come from reputable sources. Overall the article seems to get to the point fairly quickly.

2.    I am not sure if this is due to the access or prevalence of information or author bias, but the section 'United Kingdom' is a lot more fleshed out than any other country's section whereas all the other sections are one to two sentences. I would suggest compiling more resources for information about blackmail and how it is determined in different countries. I also think adding other types of examples of blackmail would help, what else is it used for other than for money and property? Maybe add specific examples that would help create an idea of how it is used.

3.	The most important thing the author could do to improve the article would be to add examples and broaden the definition of 'blackmail' a little. What I mean by broaden the definition is to add different examples and situations in which it is relevant and thereby adding to the original definition indirectly and potentially directly if the right information is found.

Cantstavwontstav (talk) 03:33, 2 April 2018 (UTC)