User talk:Emanel2/sandbox

=Evaluations=

11/14/2018 Evaluation by kkatiekrue
Points:37/40 Grade:92.5%

Spelling/Grammar - Nearly Meets Standard - I was a little lost in the third sentence of the second paragraph.

Language - Exceeds Standard - Very neutral tone

Organization - Exceeds Standard - Lots of info, but still easy to read

Coding - Exceeds Standard - Should Dialects in the header be capitalized?

Validity - Exceeds Standard

Completion - Meets Standard

Relevance - Exceeds Standard - Great topic

Sources - Exceeds Standard - The sources look good.

Citations - Exceeds Standard

References - Nearly Meets Standard - The links for your book citations #3 and #9 might need help, they only go to a generic Wiki page on ISBN numbers. #10 also might not link to what you intended. Kkatiekrue (talk) 04:01, 15 November 2018 (UTC)kkatiekrue

11/15/2018 Evaluation by Jenjen731

 * Points: 43.5/40
 * Grade: 108%

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds Standard Great, but maybe switching the word "of" to "in" in the second to last sentence in the first paragraph. "...bilingual education of the region of Madrid." to "...bilingual education in the region of Madrid."

Language
Exceeds Standard Neutral and easy to understand.

Organization
Meets Standard

Coding
Exceeds Standard

Validity
Exceeds Standard

Completion
Meets Standard

Relevance
Exceeds Standard Great topic, I learned a bit while reading it.

11/15/2018 Evaluation by Benjamin Pocheron

 * Points: 43/40
 * Grade: 107.5%

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds Standard

Language
Exceeds Standard Neutral, great!

Organization
Meets Standard

Coding
Meets Standard Maybe link some words in your text to other Wikipedia's pages?

Validity
Meets Standard It would be even better if you can bring more precision to the following "which was from about 1492 to around 1659". "bilingual education", for what languages? "so it is considered to be a linguistic isolate", who considers that? Does everybody agree?

Completion
Exceeds Standard

Relevance
Meets Standard

12/4/2018 Evaluation by HelpMeKnow08

 * Points: 42.5/40
 * Grade: 106.25%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly Meets Standard - I was a little lost in the third sentence of the second paragraph.

Language
Meets Standard - Suggested edits: First paragraph first sentence, maybe use "end their" instead of "conclude an," fourth sentence "In 2013" and "anticipating" instead of "waiting," fifth sentence, "declined" instead of "have rejected," sixth sentence "came out with the request" could be written more clearly, eighth sentence "was made" instead of "was being made," last sentence in first paragraph change "which" to "who." Second paragraph first sentence state the exact date "November 29, 2013," and possibly delete the sentence in the first paragraph that also refers to signing the treaty; it seems more useful in the second paragraph. Second paragraph second sentence can have more description; it kind of sounds like a sleepover (were they peacefully protesting through the night?), fourth sentence "forceful" instead of "forcing," sixth sentence could be updated to "On the second day of protesting nearly 800,000 people gathered from all corners of Ukraine to Khreshchatyk - the main street of Kiev." When describing the conflicts by the President's building, this isn't clear. Did the protests move there from where they started? The sentence about putting up tents could be added to the other reference about the 800,000 people gathering. I'd delete the sentence "It was a very cruel Administration." This sounds like an opinion and also like the opening sentence to a whole new paragraph. Third paragraph change "grouping" to "group," delete "shamefully" since it sounds like an opinion and I think we need to more simply state the facts. Change "beaten up to death" to "beaten to death", "government's special forces," "Thus, more people began coming from the entire city of Kiev to Maidan." In the fourth paragraph, last sentence you name two people who died. Were they prominent people, or you can just call them citizens or protestors or some other term to help describe who they are.

Organization
Meets Standard - A good intro paragraph or brief overview sentence to describe the heading "Kiev Euromaidan" would be great. I had to Google the term because I didn't know what it was and it still wasn't explained in the first paragraph.

Coding
Exceeds Standard

Validity
Exceeds Standard

Completion
Exceeds Standard

Relevance
Exceeds Standard - Yes! Very good!

12/5/2018 Evaluation by Benjamin Pocheron

 * Points: 40.5/40
 * Grade: 101.25%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets Standard (4)

1. Great job.

Language
Meets Standard (4)

1. Very neutral. Sometimes too much? I feel like I sometimes read facts, facts, just for reading facts.

Organization
Meets Standard (4)

1. Can be better for the eyes if you add sub-headers for your different paragraphs.

2. Good chronology of events.

Coding
Meets Standard (4)

1. You could link some works or nouns to existing Wikipedia pages.

Validity
Meets Standard (4)

Completion
Exceeds Standard (4.5)

Relevance
Meets Standard (4)

1. You begin with "Ukraine decided to conclude an association with the European Union." What is the context? Why did they decide that?

2. "There had already been an appointed date for the approval of the association." What association...?

3. What does this treaty do?