User talk:Emelders/sandbox

Looks like you're getting started with the project and with Wiki--great job. I like to see that you're assembling references. Now try to build some more text.Derosadual (talk) 00:49, 18 February 2013 (UTC)

Notes on your article's creation
This is looking pretty good so far, but let's cover a few points here. 1. Remove the word introduction, this isn't a college paper, this is a encyclopedic article. Instead do a quick and dirty overview and and jump right into the history of the topic etc.

2. I see proper names and organization titles, make sure you  the first time on them to link to there pages.

3. cite every line, there is a lot of information where I can't tell what source it is from. It cannot be at the end of the paragraph alone. As you increase the number of citations, you are going to see why I suggested using my citation style, because you cannot only provide a link to the URL in the article. You should already be seeing this in your references as we speak.

Good luck and keep it up!

Kasey Kayz911 (talk) 01:37, 11 April 2013 (UTC)