User talk:Emilielimoges/sandbox

Hey, does anyone have any suggestions on how to make our snacks more united? (Enjie)

We could rank them by nutritional value Czt430 (talk) 00:24, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

I think that's a good idea, should we make it all one text so that it flows, instead of a list of different snacks? (Enjie) Does anyone else have any ideas? (Enjie)

Who is our audience? (Emilie)

I was thinking that we might be able to make our audience freshman that live on Penn State campus who may not have access to bigger stores to buy these snacks so we could rank them higher for accessibility and availability like if you can get them at the markets in the dorm commons or somewhere on else campus. We could also use nutrition as criteria and say that it is important to eat healthy snacks to avoid the freshman 15 or something. (Emilie)

With the use of this audience we can make a criteria that fits to their needs. What kind of criteria should we have? Maybe nutrition, taste, accessibility on campus? Not sure what else, any suggestions? (Derek)

Maybe price too? Also I think we should make sure all of our snacks are a specific brand. I know for mine I did popcorn and didn't put a specific brand but we can do like skinny pop or Orville redenbachers microwave popcorn or something. (Emilie)

Picking a brand would be helpful. Price is a good criteria. I dont think accessibility on campus should be a criteria since they're all available from the market. We could instead do something like how messy the snack is or if it gives off a smell if our audience are college students they may want to take their snack to class. Czt430 (talk) 02:04, 15 April 2020 (UTC)

Also for Enjie's question the syllabus wants us to have an intro and then 5 subsections for each snack. Here's what the instructions say on what we should write in each one:

"Each subsection should: describe a snack food; address any particular relevance it might have (or not have) for your chosen audience; and highlight its strengths and/or weaknesses with respect to your chosen criteria. There is plenty of other information you might include, but this will depend on your audience and criteria."Czt430 (talk) 02:08, 15 April 2020 (UTC)

How are we going to rank them? Maybe on a scale with numbers like 1-5 or 1-10? Just so we have a definitive way to show our audience how we came to our conclusions. (Emilie)

I was thinking since we have three salty snacks and two sweet we could use that as a way to transition from ones to the next. Starting with the salty snacks and then ending with the sweet snacks. (Enjie)

I Added pricing to the first two snacks, I tried to incorporate them in a way that flowed with the writing, but the other two I didn't, if someone wants to do that. Also for my Snack if someone could also add pricing just to show consistency among the paragraphs. (Enjie)

We should also probably take out the personal stories since they have no relevance to our criteria and ranking the snacks for our audience. (Emilie)

Yeah we should take them out. Also, a number scale would be good.Czt430 (talk) 22:51, 15 April 2020 (UTC)

Yeah if we add images and an actual rank system with the snacks that would be great (Derek)

I removed all of the memories from the snacks except mine. Could someone please edit the popcorn section by adding in information about the specific brand, Orville Redenbacher microwave popcorn, and take out the personal story? I also added links to all of our snacks.(Emilie)

Yeah I edited it out. Im going to start with popcorn on rankings for each criteria from 1-5. Can someone else start on another snack. For nutrition I think im going to use calories per serving or package as well as sodium, carbs, sugars, and whatever else seems fittingCzt430 (talk) 01:10, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

I added rankings in the Pop'ems section. (Emilie)

I am going to add the rankings for the craisins (Evan)

I added rankings for hairbo gold bears (Emilie)

Cool I added some reasoning's for the chosen criteria in the intro Czt430 (talk) 16:15, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

Hey, I just wanted to do one final check in. I looked over everything and i feel like we added everything we said we were going to, is everyone content with how our writing is now? (Enjie)

Hey whats everyones usernames? (Enjie)

Yeah I think it looks good too. My username is emilielimoges (Emilie)

Do we each have to submit the link in canvas? (Emilie)