User talk:EmilyStein/sandbox

=Sarah's Peer Review=

Emily, you've really done a lot on this page. Well done!!

I will peer review your work in terms of the five elements of a good Wikipedia page:

Good Intro: Your main introduction is good and gets the point across.

Clear Structure: By adding "Subheading to..." it makes your structure a bit confusing. I understand this is just for your sandbox page, but I think it will benefit you more to make the actual headers and subheadings in order to see how your page will actually sit visually and therefore will allow you to see how your pictures will sit on the page as well. That being said, I don't know that I think your beginnings section needs a subheader - this should be point blank like your writing is under your main heading of "beginnings." Beyond this: this is more of a stylistic preference - but I might like to see you create a timeline out of your history section to add clarity to outsiders who might be seeking knowledge on the topic for the first time.

Balanced Coverage: You have a good, wide-range of information, but I think by adjusting your structure a bit, this might make the balance more clear to the audience and will also add clarity to your contents box at the top of the page.

Neutral Content: Your language is neutral and factual - good job!

Reliable Sources: Sources are reliable, wide-ranging, and scholarly.

Good job overall Emily! I think you have everything you need on the page already!! It's all there! In my opinion, I would just rearrange it to add a bit more clarity.

SarahBarket (talk) 16:05, 16 November 2017 (UTC)

=Juliana's Peer Review=

Great work, Emily!

Using Professor Rauser's rubric as a guide, you have created a very successful page. You have a solid amount of scholarly sources that cover a wide range of material. I like that your page focuses on the importance of the overall during specific moments in history as well as their connection to women. I do agree with Sarah in that some of the subheadings could be rearranged a bit. The "Beginnings" subheading could be its own heading since "History" sort of covers the whole span of the progression of overalls. Also, I think that the "Developments" subheading could just be added to the end of the "Beginnings" section. Since it is only a couple sentences long, and it seems to be an extension of the beginning of the history of overalls. Other than these minor structure changes, I think your page is great! The style and quality of writing is clear and follows the guidelines of wikipedia writing. One final thought- I know you asked Elise about this in class, but I definitely think it would add visual interest to your page to place some of your images on the left side as well.

Jkeagle (talk) 14:56, 17 November 2017 (UTC)