User talk:Emilymerkel3/sandbox

Assignment 1
It's a good article to work on. The very first sentence could use some work. For example, the word "eponymous" suggests that the novel was called "Blackout" in the original Italian. I'd verify that. And yes, the plot summary is way too long. But remember, you don't need to spend too much time on this assignment. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:14, 7 February 2015 (UTC)
 * The first sentence in the lead wasn't quite right. You'll notice that someone else improved it. I'd go even further and take out the comma. Then it would be perfect. The rest of your edits was very good. Josef Horáček (talk) 17:52, 17 February 2015 (UTC)

Assignment 2
Association of the United States Army — Preceding unsigned comment added by Emilymerkel3 (talk • contribs) 05:17, 9 February 2015 (UTC)
 * The article is quite short. To add four sources, you may need to expand it. Also, make sure you can find four good secondary sources. If you want to work on it, go ahead. If you decide to choose something else, let me know. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:33, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

History of the Grand Canyon area — Preceding unsigned comment added by Emilymerkel3 (talk • contribs) 00:02, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
 * It looks like you found some excellent sources on the topic after all. Josef Horáček (talk) 00:24, 17 February 2015 (UTC)
 * There were some problems with the way you formatted your citations. Another user fixed some of the problems. Josef Horáček (talk) 17:58, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

Assignment 3
Ice Age (2002 film) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Emilymerkel3 (talk • contribs) 00:58, 20 February 2015 (UTC)
 * The article chose has a very short lead for a relatively big article. For the most part, the article seems well balanced. I think the plot section should be more summarized rather than paraphrased. The information seems to be in the right order. To help better the lead, i would add more information about the plot and maybe another sentence about the production of the film. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Emilymerkel3 (talk • contribs) 00:41, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
 * This draft still needs a lot of work. 1. Organize: why mention the release date twice? 2. Revise for style: You have two paragraphs starting with "This is," among other problems. Also the word "preceding" makes no sense here. 3. Proofread carefully.Josef Horáček (talk) 18:17, 1 March 2015 (UTC)