User talk:Emmadart/sandbox

Emily Boyd Peer Review:

This seems like a great start and clearly shows what kind of information you want to have in your article. I would only suggest to keep working on it and maybe narrowing down your topic a little bit more? It seems like you have a lot of information that you want to cover within the word count. Seems like a really interesting topic though! Emilyboyd3 (talk) 20:37, 27 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer review:

The amount of information you want to cover seems like an awful lot, but you definitely have organized the outline in a super methodical order. I'm interested to see what this evolves into when you start writing it! Mr.nosilrub (talk) 21:03, 27 March 2019 (UTC)

Gabriel Delgado Peer Review Response
Emma,

Thank you so much for your comments and critiques on my wiki draft. A lot of what you mentioned in your peer review regarded correcting grammatical erros and sentence structure. In general, what I tend to do is write anything that comes to mind at first then edit my work, I hand't edit edit my draft so this helps start the process along. Some of the examples you stated in your peer review did not sound awkward at first yet, now that you had mentioned it their are ways that I can improve those sentences. You also mentioned adding a few visuals certain places of my article which I plan on doing now. Overall, all your comments were very helpful and, when implemented, will improve strengthen my article. Once again, thank you.