User talk:Emmaeadwyer/sandbox

Peer Review
Hi! I've reviewed your article so far and it looks great! However, I do have some quick suggestions to make. I noticed that you use a lot of quotations, which can be extremely helpful, but I think it is important to go back through and add in a bit more of your own personal explanation to the topic - maybe try to explain what some of the quotes would mean in context of the broader article. There is also some confusing with your article headings and it makes it seem like there is some information missing, so perhaps using subheadings in those cases, as well as adding small blurbs under the main heading would be helpful in alleviating reader confusion. Other than that I dont really have any suggestions to your article!! Good work and good luck on the rest of your article.

Sheridan.lea (talk) 03:11, 13 April 2015 (UTC)