User talk:Emmak96/sandbox

Hey Emma! Your edits look like they're getting along really well. I just have a couple suggestions that might help.

They're mostly structural suggestions, so breathe easy. Small things like moving your introduction of the play to the very top of the article, in stead of below the glossary, and inserting some breaks in the paragraph on Act I would really help the organization of this article and its readability. Having a list of the original casting of the original run is a really great addition-- but don't forget to fill out the info for Act II! Otherwise, I think your article is pretty set.

Cheers! Run desdemona (talk) 15:32, 17 November 2014 (UTC)

The page is looking good so far, just a couple things to help maybe:

Possible list of characters, including who they are in relation to the main character? Maybe try reorganizing the page's layout to make it more readable? And finish up the summary

other than that, it's looking awesome. RachelNCF (talk) 16:21, 17 November 2014 (UTC)

comments
Great synopsis of Act 1, but I don't understand the last sentence. Was "Easter throws and knife..." supposed to be "Easter throws a knife...."? Also, that last sentence says that the knife throwing was indicative of something. Was that something the author said? You should include who said these things or indicate that it is one person's interpretation. And you should defiantly include where you read the play and where you found out about the first showing.

SydAtWiki (talk) 17:16, 17 November 2014 (UTC)