User talk:Emmaras/sandbox

Comment: In the very last section typed, it reads, "Despite the obvious tendency..." There should be a neutral standpoint. One cannot assume it is "obvious." It may be very clear to some, while it may not even be a passing thought to another. Emily Roeder (talk) 03:38, 3 April 2018 (UTC)

Hey Emily, I thought the same thing about the section where the author said, "Despite the obvious tendency..." when peer revising. The tendency may not be obvious to some but very well may be to others. You can't assume for everyone and especially not for an article that is supposed to be neutral. Nicole.lallier (talk) 12:49, 12 April 2018 (UTC)


 * Good developmental structure and sections clearly categorized. Easy to understand!
 * More line breaks and comma (or shorter sentences) would be helpful to read.
 * Could use more links. N.chiaki (talk) 03:59, 5 April 2018 (UTC)

In reference to the article summary: This article has a lot of strong text already but I think incorporating supporting images would be helpful for the reader. Nicole.lallier (talk) 17:44, 21 February 2018 (UTC) Nicole.lallier (talk) 03:53, 27 February 2018 (UTC)

Here are my three sources of the 10. I can find more if you would like. https://www.shrm.org/hr-today/news/hr-magazine/pages/0615-employee-monitoring.aspx

https://search.proquest.com/openview/f74755d243a02bad92cf657a515168a6/1?pq-origsite=gscholar&cbl=40946

http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/j.1744-1714.2011.01116.x/full Nicole.lallier (talk) 15:35, 9 March 2018 (UTC)

Here are more sources as well

This is an older source but has a lot of good information for the ethical section of the article: Ciocchetti, C. A. (2011). The Eavesdropping Employer: A Twenty-First Century Framework for Employee Monitoring. American Business Law Journal, 48(2), 285-369. doi:10.1111/j.1744-1714.2011.01116.x

This is newer and ethical based but has good foundational information as well: Holt, M., Lang, B., & Sutton, S. G. (2017). Potential Employees' Ethical Perceptions of Active Monitoring: The Dark Side of Data Analytics. Journal Of Information Systems, 31(2), 107-124. doi:10.2308/isys-51580

Legal information (this is also an older source but I looked into the journal it can from and it says it is current as for employee legal information but we could omit this source): Friedman, B., & Reed, L. (2007). Workplace Privacy: Employee Relations and Legal Implications of Monitoring Employee E-mail Use. Employee Responsibilities & Rights Journal, 19(2), 75-83. doi:10.1007/s10672-007-9035-1

Good current legal source: Stevens, M. (2017). Employee monitoring and the surrounding legal issues. Car & Accessories Trader, 16-19. Emmaras (talk) 21:24, 11 March 2018 (UTC)

I found this link that I think has a relevant and strong definition for our topic. https://www.worktime.com/employee-monitoring-definition/ Nicole.lallier (talk) 23:01, 22 March 2018 (UTC)

Dead Links
The only dead link I found pre-existing in our article was number 10. It says it's a dead link too, but should we remove it and it's corresponding information from the article? Nicole.lallier (talk) 14:00, 22 March 2018 (UTC)