User talk:Emmasmith9185/sandbox

Jacey's Peer Review
Your article is very well written! You added lots of new information to the article. Your edits provided the article with a lot more structure! The only tip I would give would be to take out a couple of your sentences that you sort of stated your opinion in. Instead of using sentences that sound like they are from an essay, make sure all of your sentences sound as if they came from an encyclopedia.

Thank you, Jacey! I returned to the article and revised the sentences you mentioned. I appreciate you for catching this issue!

Ashleigh's peer review- Over all you've done a great job. The only thing I would correct is capitalizing the names of the dieases you added. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Amdyer4504 (talk • contribs) 15:29, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

I returned to the article and corrected that! Thank you!