User talk:Emsroldan/sandbox

Emsroldan (talk) 01:16, 27 September 2016 (UTC)

Hi Emily, Nice work on the Smart TV article. Here’s my feedback on each section: Security and Privacy: Is your plan to integrate this section with what’s in the Security and Privacy section on the live page? If so, how? Also, please make sure that you are citing your sources using the citation tool so that others can see where your information is coming from. Market Share: I like the example that you used here to discuss the kinds of payment methods that Smart TV manufacturers have been working on. One minor editing note: You put quotation marks (“) before Daniel Lee, and I’m not sure that these are supposed to be there. Also, for the Market Share section, I think that the information here should also focus on the amount of households that own Smart TVs, similar to what’s in this section on the live page at the moment. Were you able to find any information on this aspect? Platforms: You did a great job with this section! What you might want to do is make paragraph breaks between the types of platforms managed by companies vs the ones managed by vendors. So, the sentence beginning with Android TV would be the start of a new paragraph and the vendors beginning with Amazon would start another paragraph. Overall – this is great! I agree that images should be added here as well. In the Wikipedia editing book I handed out to the class, there is a section that talks about how to add images to an article. Take a look at it to see how you might add some pictures to the article to add a visual piece. Best, Prof.bgreg (talk) 23:43, 23 October 2016 (UTC)