User talk:Emtrum7658/sandbox

The language of the article feels very emotional, with words like "ruthless" and "tyrant." Maybe attempt to passive and neutralize the wording used to create a better stance, from a wording perspective. Also, format your sources by citing them with the cite tool.Jacobgpx (talk) 15:19, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
Your edits so far are very good, and seem to fit well with the article. I agree with the previous review that it is very emotional and seems to be presuading towards a certain stance. Try rephrasing to remove any bias in the article. Also see if you can find a primary source from General Butler.Sarahtatehahn (talk) 15:25, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review Nick Lance
Overall great information. All information is relevant to the topic and provides the reader with crucial knowledge. As the other reviews say, I would also neutralize the article so it doesn't seem biased. All sources are reliable, all links work. After replacing and rephrasing some things you will have a very well written article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nick S. Lance (talk • contribs) 15:41, 22 October 2018 (UTC)