User talk:Engl101kilpatrick

1) Did your partner follow the format guidelines for a Wikipedia article (contains a lead and a reference list, the right things are bolded, section headings are correct, etc.)? If not, what needs to be altered to make it look like a Wikipedia article? No headings and no picture, but the site didn't save his work.

2) Is the article well-written? (“its prose is engaging, even brilliant, and of a professional standard”) Select one sentence that you consider to be well-written. Also select at least one sentence where the writing could be clarified or polished up to make the article more interesting and informative.

Well-written: Childhood Chris Herren grew up in the small town of Fall River, Massachusetts.

Needs work:

3) Is the article comprehensive? (“it neglects no major facts or details and places the subject in context”) List one section of the article you find to be very comprehensive. Also list one section of the article that needs to be expanded or contextualized better to make the article more complete and persuasive.

Comprehensive:Childhood Chris Herren grew up in the small town of Fall River, Massachusetts.

Needs work:

4) Is the article well-researched? (“it is a thorough and representative survey of the relevant literature”) If the sources listed are from websites, follow the links. List each website and include whether you find it to be credible or not.

Websites: No references

5) Is the article neutral? (“it presents views fairly and without bias”) Does it fulfill the Wikipedia ideal of Neutral Point of View (NPOV)? Include any sentences that appear to be biased.

Biased sentences:Chris was going to be the big man on campus as he soon found out.

6) Is the article of the correct length? (“It stays focused on the main topic without going into unnecessary detail”) Does it meet the minimum length requirement for the class of 2 pages of text double spaced?

Yes

Stable version of article
Are you part of a class? Here's a stable version of the Chris Herren article, as you last edited it. I've since made some changes, because I didn't feel comfortable with the article going live in the state it was in. It wasn't clear to me what was being referenced by what, and when you're writing about a living person, it's important to be clear about those things. When you're using a reference, try to put it immediately after the content it supports. You can use "ref tags" to do this. See Referencing_for_beginners.

Nothing you wrote has been permanently deleted; it's all in the page history. If you have any questions, let me know. Thanks! Zagal e jo^^^ 01:31, 8 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Just to clarify, I do appreciate that you tried to expand the page, and I think there's a lot of material there we can use. It's always good to find more people who want to write about basketball. We just need to get the sources straightened out. If you need something to show your teacher (or whatever) in the meantime, just use this stable version: Zagal e jo^^^ 07:44, 8 December 2011 (UTC)