User talk:Englandjacqui

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Hello, Englandjacqui, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Evaluating Your Article
-Overall the article is very unorganized and does not have an effective layout -Some parts written in first person -So many different sources, some of which are out of date and can easily be replaced more updated research -Article seems to be too long and and many ideas are over-represented in a majority of the article -The talk page talked a lot about how unorganized people think the article is and how it started out focused, but fell apart quickly -Could tie it in more to businesses and how it is relevant and how to combat it in a company setting Englandjacqui (talk) 04:54, 15 February 2018 (UTC)