User talk:Entropyfive/sandbox

I like feedback on my talk page

Peer Review by KatSn on TechCongress article:

Hi Entropyfive!

I really like the organizational structure of your article so far, but there is definitely room to expand upon it!

One thing I noticed was the scarce use of citations and sources—make sure to properly cite the information. I feel like your lead section is concise, but then the Background section reiterates some of the same exact information (e.g. bridging the gap). Your Background section focuses heavily on Travis Scott, especially the founding of the program. Maybe include some of the history of the fellowship, or possibly create a new section?

For the funding section, keep the number format consistent throughout the article—i.e. change “eight thousand dollars” to $8000.

Grammar-wise, I feel like you can smoothly combine some of the shorter sentences, especially those in the Logistics section, with transitional phrases. Otherwise, a good beginning for an article—just be sure to cite properly and gather more sources! --KatSn (talk) 06:49, 24 March 2018 (UTC)

Hi- Kat

I really liked the feedback you gave here. I will definitely incorporate this into my article.

Best, Ravin Entropyfive (talk) 03:01, 3 April 2018 (UTC)

Tech Congress Draft Peer Review
When I go to this article it says there is no article with this name so I'm guessing you maybe haven't created it yet? I think it is a good idea for an article but you obviously need to add some more information before I can review it. When I google Tech Congress the only source that comes up is their website so I'm guessing there may not be enough sources for this article. I will check back when it is more developed! Ella12345678 (talk) 22:56, 1 April 2018 (UTC)

Hi- Ella

I enjoyed the feedback and will take everything into consideration.

Best, Ravin Entropyfive (talk) 02:57, 3 April 2018 (UTC)