User talk:Eric.mehnert/sandbox

Eric.mehnert

User:Eric.mehnert/sandbox

Great start! Nice work backing up all your clams with a authoritative sources. Maybe if you cant find information for the extra "citations needed" you can delete it completely? I would try making things more succinct and try to avoid words like "which", "although", & "however." Try to break up longer sentences into different sentences to help it read smoother. Be careful where you put commas (indicates a pause between parts of a sentence). I think the content you're using is very relevant to your topic choice. It looks like the last paragraph could use more of your voice in it with more sources. Is there anything else you could talk about? Who were making the armored tanks for Germany? How expensive were they to produce? What training was needed to operate them?

Overall your voice is heard and your tone is clear and neutral. Geisinsj7254 (talk) 23:34, 11 November 2019 (UTC)