User talk:Ericksondembowski/sandbox

HI ERICKSON - HERE IS SOME FEEDBACK. MY COMMENTS ARE IN CAPS SO THAT THEY STAND OUT FROM ANYONE ELSE'S COMMENTS! GREAT JOB GETTING STARTED. YOU HAVE THE WIKIPEDIA FORMAT ALL IN HAND AND THE MATERIAL YOU HAVE IN THE TWO BIG SECTIONS HAS ABOUT THE RIGHT TONE. THINK ABOUT READERS WHO KNOW NOTHING ABOUT THE TOPIC AND HOW TO GIVE THEM ENOUGH BACKGROUND AND DETAILS TO UNDERSTAND WHO HE IS. DO YOU NEED MORE FUR TRADE BASICS YOU CAN LINK TO OTHER ARTICLES IN WIKIPEDIA ABOUT OTHER MOUNTAIN MEN AND PLACES TO HELP YOUR READER.

YOU KNOW WHAT TO DO NEXT. . . WRITE THOSE NEXT FEW SECTIONS AND DECIDE HOW YOU WANT THE ARTICLE TO END. HIS DEATH? THE END OF THE FUR TRADE. YOUR SOURCES ARE GOOD BUT WORK ON FINDING MORE USING THE OU LIBRARY WEBSITE. A LOT OF THAT OLDER STUFF IS ONLINE AND SO ARE RECENT ARTICLES. YOU HAVE ALREADY FIGURED OUT HOW MUCH YOU NEED TO CITE - SO A FOOTNOTE WITH ALMOST EVERY SENTENCE LOOKS GOOD. GREAT START WITH THIS AND KEEP GOING. I'M PUTTING A CHECKLIST OF THINGS TO THINK ABOUT AS YOU START THE NEXT DRAFT.

GREAT WORK HERE!!! ANNE HYDE

LEAD: Does your lead summarize the entire article by briefly covering all important aspects of the topic? Does it work as an outline for the whole article?

First sentence: does it serve as a definition of the article topic, with the topic itself — be it a person, place, thing, idea or concept — in bold, and a brief description that puts it into context.

(Example: Anna Anderson (c. 16 December 1896 – 12 February 1984) was the best known of several impostors who claimed to be Grand Duchess Anastasia of Russia.)

BODY: Fact-based, not persuasive writing. The article is a description of the information you can find about a topic, based on good sources.

Did you write in your own words? Check that the article doesn’t contain excessive quotations, or copy any sources, even if you’ve given them credit.

Does the article let the reader decide for themselves? Avoid persuasive language? Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral?

Did you proofread? Basic grammar and spelling are correct? Complete sentences? Remove first-person (“I/we”) or second-person (“you”) writing.

Formal tone and simple language? No technical language or jargon? Check that you’ve explained acronyms and jargon in simple English the first time you use them.

Is your formatting consistent with the rest of Wikipedia? No bullet-pointed lists or too many headings in your article.

SOURCES: Is every claim cited to a reliable source?

Are there unsourced statements? Are there enough sources

Are the sources reliable and authoritative. Does each source have citations – footnotes, bibliography, etc.

Good sources include textbooks or academic journals. Don’t cite blog posts.Afh1858 (talk) 22:55, 8 April 2020 (UTC)