User talk:Ericneumann 99/sandbox

Hi Eric!

I really appreciate how you included a summary about what you wanted to add into your article. It made it very easy for me to understand what I was looking out for before I began reading. :)

In your "Particular Baptists" section you mention that some of the practitioners identify as either "separatists or non-separatists", but you don't explain the difference between them. If the distinction between them is important to your article I think you should clarify what that distinction is. However if the distinction is not important, I would suggest removing "separatists/non-separatists" from the article and simply refer to the practitioners as practitioners. Having this extra information may cause some distraction from the main purpose of your article.

In the "Seventh Day Baptists" section you mention: "However, its greatest distinction lies in the belief that the seventh day of the week, Saturday, is to be reserved for the Sabbath." While this may be a true fact, your choice to include that it's the "greatest distinction" is biased. I recommend that you consider rephrasing the beginning of that sentence.

Your article looks organized, and overall, it appears that you have put a lot of studying, research, and work into your draft and I am excited to read the finished product. Great job!

Yaz.17 (talk) 21:54, 19 October 2018 (UTC)

Hey Eric! Your article edits are very informative and the wording is overall neutral. Also, good job on the organization! Here are some suggestions: You should add more info on immersion baptism, or add a link to it that will explain more on what it is. You should also add more on "particular baptists." You might also want to consider adding more detail to the Baptist subdivision section. Also, like Yazmin said, you should consider explaining the difference between separatists and non separatists; or also remove that part if it does not support your article's points. Rita Butrus (talk) 05:21, 20 October 2018 (UTC)