User talk:Erinkaline/Cape ground squirrel/Candyapple13 Peer Review

1.	First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?

The article does well with the use of transition words and provides enough information to give an overall picture of the Cape ground squirrel. The thing that impressed me while reviewing this article was the organization of the sections and subsections, which helped the paragraphs as a whole to flow better. A turn of phrase that described the subject really well was the “mobbing behavior” phrase that was mentioned to describe the activity of the Cape ground squirrel when a predator is present.

2.	What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?

I suggest that the author should break up some of the subsections into separate paragraphs, like the social behavior subsection. This would be an improvement because it would help for better reading and communication of the information presented.

3.	What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?

The most important thing that the author could do to improve the article is to add article words like “the”, “a”, and “an” in places where needed to help with a better flow and easier understanding of the information presented.

4.	Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? If so, what?

Yes, in the behavior and ecology section, there is a communication subsection that talks about how the Cape ground squirrels communicate. Although my article mentions communication, it does so in the lead, and I think that a communication section could be added to the behavioral and ecology section of my article so that the communication of my species could be discussed there instead of in the lead.

5.	Are the sections organized well, in a sensible order? Would they make more sense presented some other way (chronologically, for example)? Specifically, does the information they are adding to the article make sense where they are putting it?

The sections in this article are well organized and are arranged in a sensible order. I think the arrangement of the sections in this article should remain how they are presented because once the Cape ground squirrel is described, it then mentions distribution which is one of the determining factors that plays a role in the behavior and ecology of the Cape ground squirrel, which is the section presented after the distribution, and lastly, the status section. The information added to the article does make sense where they are putting it, in the behavior and ecology section, because it further expands upon the thermoregulation mechanisms of the Cape ground squirrel already mentioned in the article.

6.	Is each section's length equal to its importance to the article's subject? Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic?

Each section does seem to equal in length to the relative importance of the article’s subject. All sections seem necessary enough to give a reader enough information about the Cape ground squirrel and nothing in this article seems to be off-topic.

7.	Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view?

The article does not draw conclusions and does not try to convince the reader to accept one point of view over the other. It simply sticks to the facts from the provided sources.

8.	Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral? For example, "the best idea," "most people," or negative associations, such as "While it's obvious that x, some insist that y."

No, all words and phrases in this article feel neutral and does not include any personal opinions or negative associations.

9.	Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors?

Most of the statements in the article are connected to reliable sources, mostly including journal articles and research.

10.	Are there a lot of statements attributed to one or two sources? If so, it may lead to an unbalanced article, or one that leans too heavily into a single point of view.

Overall, there is an equal variety of sources listed for the different statements that are made. However, there are two sources, source 5 and source 9, that are cited more often within the article than the other sources.

11.	Are there any unsourced statements in the article, or statements that you can't find stated in the references? Just because there is a source listed, doesn't mean it's presented accurately!

No, every statement in the article is sourced and every statement sourced is listed in the references section. Candyapple13 (talk) 21:25, 9 October 2022 (UTC)