User talk:Erinmrmurray/sandbox

Hi Erin and Abbey, I really like the idea you have of how you will divide up the article into six sub-sections to be able to clearly outline exactly what Treat 5 was all about. The guided questions you proposed are very good and I believe they will significantly improve the article. The article is unbiased and leaves a lot of room for improvement. The only critique I have is that a lot of the information is very vague, and as someone who has no previous knowledge on Treaty 5, I was left with a lot of question. Also, I think the opening paragraph is a little too short and does not provide enough detail. Some of the wording is confusing and I felt as if I was reading short bullet points, rather than an opening paragraph. This is a quick and easy fix and I think will improve the article a lot. You're off to a great start!