User talk:Eriseyas2020/sandbox

Team 4-Peer Review Comments
- Add citations - keep heading formate consistent (spelling out/using numerical numbers, commas, periods) - Hard to understand and recognize relevance to poverty, explain more within the extra paragraphs that explain how the episodes relate to poverty - Include outside sources relating to poverty (good idea having a wrap up paragraph after episode, but need to back up information with sources that pertain to it) - Sounds biased and opinion based; Information needs to be objective - Episode 2; Wrap up paragraph too wordy and hard to understand, run-on sentences occurred - Episode 3; add wrap up paragraph explaining how this ties into poverty (could try shortening it and pick out main details) - Suggestion; make focus of the page on "how the media portrays poverty" since the TV show is very recent it would be a good way to relate it to everyday poverty - Make sure to cite TV show since it is the main portion of the page

Team 1 Evaluation
Reiterating what team 4 has already said... ---Citations!!!! -Consistency in formatting -Grammar and typos are littered throughout. -Overall, make your writing more concise and to the point. It is "fluffy" and overly long. Also, more simple/objective language choices - There are places in your article where you can link to other articles instead of over explaining (example: the first couple of sentences in episode 1)

However, in contrast to team 4's evaluation, I would not add specific connections to poverty. You can link certain articles and things of that nature, But directly explaining how the episodes relate to poverty is not the goal of Wikipedia, so readers will have to make that connection themselves.

We think you all are off to a great start! You've provided all of the information needed for the page to be relevant/informational. Now, I would go back and edit reiterations, typos (comma usage, run on sentences, subject/verb agreement, etc.), and overall length of your sections. Good luck! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cooperl2020 (talk • contribs) 19:03, 2 April 2019 (UTC)