User talk:Erobicheau483/sandbox

Eric's Peer Review
Eric! First, the article you chose is already a great pick because we both chose the same one - as you already know! You have a great list of citations so far! Looking at your draft versus mine, I like how we edited different sections of the article so maybe we can get together at one point over email, or in the ss center and critique each section and maybe add to them? Thank you for the idea of a reference box, as I can see on your sandbox page it makes it a lot more clear on where you got your information from in those certain sections. Maybe we can find a way to reduce the use of commas? I'm not saying theres anything wrong with commas but maybe theres easier ways to structure the sentences? I could be wrong. We can definitaly add to the importance of primary producers but you absolutely got a great start on it! Sort of like the building blocks of the section. Maybe after the importance section we can add one about (if there is any) the disadvantages of primary producers, or if anything can go wrong with them. Great primary production draft, very good speech, much wikipedian accent. very nice. Also in your reference table i see there are multiples of citations. Are they the same link or different? if the same maybe you can remove them from the box and just click duplicate when adding the same citation. :) Great work and great start!!!!

~Emma