User talk:Eschadauer104

October 2018
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Reversion at Oaksterdam University
Hello, while your enthusiasm is appreciated, I looked over your edits at Oaksterdam University and decided to revert them. Here's a few of the reasons so you can better understand what we're looking for, and you're totally welcome to contribute if you can bear factors like these in mind:


 * the overall phrasing of a lot of it, especially the first paragraph, completely reads as an "About Us!" page rather than an outside and neutral description. It's "telling a story" instead of telling dry facts.
 * phrases like "worked tirelessly" are subjective, and a way of praising who you're talking about; we have to stick to totally neutral language
 * very little of what you added has any footnotes. You must cite your sources, see WP:REFB for the basics of how to do so. Basically, for literally any sentence/group of sentences/paragraph you add, it should be extremely clear to the reader exactly where those facts are documented and proven.

Just some suggestions, fell free to ping me on my Talk page if you have follow-up questions. Goonsquad LCpl Mulvaney (talk) 22:52, 30 October 2018 (UTC)