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'''Human trafficking in Thailand
 * I think what this page needs the most is to be re-formatted. Theres a lot of information in it, but I am not sure if it is laid out in the most effective way.
 * Here are my formatting ideas:

1. Overview 2. Types of Human Trafficking 2.1 Labor Trafficking 2.2 Sex trafficking 2.3 I don't know enough about the issues of human trafficking in Thailand to make a real judgement call here - but I think Kidnapping could go under here? Or maybe it should be its own section? I'm not really knowledgeable enough about the situation to say, but I definitely don't think it should be the first section. You could maybe make a section called "Trafficking Recruitment" and put kidnapping under that along with some other information about how people end up trafficked. 3. Prevention 3.1 Government Policies 3.2 Court Cases 4. Government Protection
 * Within overview you could talk about Thailand as a source, destination, and transit country for different types of human trafficking. Don't go too in depth about the types of trafficking here because you can explain that later, but I think an overview of what forms trafficking can take in Thailand would be helpful.
 * This is where you could use Thailand's fishing industry as an example rather than having it as its own section on its own.
 * You should also talk about different sectors here too other than fishing
 * This is where you should link to Sophie's article "Sex trafficking in Thailand" rather than the current main article "Child Prostitution in Thailand" because not only children are trafficked.
 * Use some of the information already in the article because it is helpful information but try and organize it more.
 * I think you could also talk about government corruption here - or maybe it would be better in "Government Protection" the last section I created
 * This is where you can explain some of the legalities and how the issue has been dealt with in the past
 * You also should conclude the information about the 2016 trial because it is not 2018 and there is no ending
 * What is the government doing to stop this
 * Different policies and decisions
 * Government corruption info here?

''' Peer review by Sophie P:

Article 1, your potential subheading: "Thailand's socioeconomic culture, the driving force of trafficking"

- You could make the subheading shorter, maybe just "socioeconomic factors" or "economic background..." the page is about trafficking, so as the reader we already know that's what your addition will be in relation to in some way or another

- Maximize inclusivity in your language whenever possible! This includes gender, secuality, area of origin, etc. In general, maybe say "people" rather than "women" to include all victim populations in your contribution

- Other than the North, where else do large migrant populations come from? Maybe separate this between those coming from within Thailand ("source" areas) and from outside the country. Migration and human trafficking are intimately tied, and you could definitely add a separate sub-section about patterns of migration in regards to human trafficking in and outside of Thailand.

- When referring to the informal sector, consider elaborating a bit... who does this include? Who does it not include? What types of people are informal workers and why? I have some good resources from my own research that I'd be happy to share with you on this!

Article 2, your potential subheading: "Thailand as a destination/transit/source country"

- You could shorten the subheading name here also! Maybe "Patterns of trafficking in Thailand" or just "Trafficking patterns"

- Great inclusion of different countries, maybe speak a bit more to why (rather than just how) migrants are coming to Thailand from these places. What's forcing them out of their homes and into Thailand? Are they running away from something, chasing something, etc?

- This is also an opportunity to increase inclusivity! Along with migrants from neighboring countries, some migrants from within Thailand (such as those from the hill tribes in the north than you mentioned) struggle with language barriers as well, which is part of why they struggle to find formal employment and become drawn into the commercial sex industry. It could be interesting to add a section where you compare/contrast the experiences of internal vs. external migrants.

- I liked how you added a section on factory conditions and labor conditions more broadly in Thailand. It gives valuable insight as to why someone might not want to take a manufacturing job and find themselves drawn into the sex industry instead.

- If you wanted to add a totally new section to this article, you could add something on bride and marriage trafficking! I didn't see the article touching on this and it is a distinct type of trafficking that has interesting cross-regional effects throughout East and Southeast Asia. Perl s (talk) 18:53, 20 March 2018 (UTC)