User talk:Ethan343/sandbox

Ethan343 peer review
Hi Ethan, The section you have written on iron production, for the bog iron article, seems to be well written, has good sources and is neutral and I think it is a good start to your contribution to the article. I would recommend reading the Wikipedia article “smelting” and read the sections on fluxes as it talks about adding lime as a flux and the section on “early iron smelting” and “later iron smelting” as you might find some good information that you can add to your paragraph in those sections or in some of the sources in those sections. After quickly reviewing the Bog Iron article I found a few other things that could be added or changed to further enhance the quality of the article.

The first thing that I think should be considered is the second paragraph under the Europe heading. That paragraph is one very large quote taken directly from another source. While it is cited, it is still not good to have such a long quote in the article. Also that quote is not directly related to bog iron in Europe, and is more of a general explanation on how bog iron is formed. I would recommend creating a new section in the article called “sources of bog iron” ,“bog iron formation” or something along those lines. Under that section I would re-write the information provide by the quote as well as gathering supporting information from other reliable sources. This would provide the reader with more background information as well as eliminate the unwanted large quote without losing any of the information. The second thing that I would consider is adding a section about the composition of bog iron as it is talked about in the introduction but not in the rest of the article. Joey Stephenson 98 (talk) 00:10, 21 February 2019 (UTC)