User talk:Etnrod/sandbox

Neil Horne

After reading my peer’s addition to his assigned article Education in Puerto Rico within the history section, I thought it was well written and a great decision. Comparing the content already within the “history” portion of the original article, I could tell there was a lack of information, very few cited sources and nothing explaining the impact of this “Foraker Act” on Puerto Rico’s education. I was impressed with the level of useful information my peer found within his research that could easily apply as well as strengthen his article.

Quick changes can be made in assuring you are not repetitive in your passage, for example, avoid starting a sentence with “The” too often. Another addition would be providing the names of both the President who appointed the commissioner of education, and the commissioner himself, to give greater detail.

Also, I do have some constructive criticism for my peer to, what I believe will improve his edit. I noticed while reading the provided draft of the edit that there were no citations, and no in-text citations, which are both very important before publishing.