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Bibliography

Audism and Deaf Education

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Eckert,Richard Clark. Rowley, Amy June"Audism: A Theory and Practice of Audiocentric Privilege" Humanity & Society Vol 37, Issue 2, pp. 101 - 130 April 18, 2013, https://doi.org/10.1177/0160597613481731.

Murray E. G. Smith, and Pamela Campbell. “Discourses on Deafness: Social Policy and the Communicative Habilitation of the Deaf.” The Canadian Journal of Sociology / Cahiers Canadiens De Sociologie, vol. 22, no. 4, 1997, pp. 437–456. JSTOR, JSTOR, www.jstor.org/stable/3341692.

Fernandes, Jane K., and Shirley Shultz Myers. “Inclusive Deaf Studies: Barriers and Pathways.” Journal of Deaf Studies and Deaf Education, vol. 15, no. 1, 2010, pp. 17–29. JSTOR, JSTOR, www.jstor.org/stable/43666251.

History of Audism

Bayton, Douglass C."Forbidden Signs: American Culture and the Campaign Against Sign Language" University of Chicago Press, Chicago and London,1996. https://books.google.com/books?hl=en&lr=&id=CURQquUqiGwC&oi=fnd&pg=PR7&dq=argument+against+sign+language+linguistics&ots=nzWAnQTyKN&sig=IM8WxfptJbwyyw00_xpRt5IG2OQ#v=onepage&q=sign%20language%20inferior&f=false

Bauman, H-Dirksen L. "Open Your Eyes: Deaf Studies Talking" University of Minnesota Press, 2008.https://books.google.com/books?id=Ah32ktcvB28C&pg=PA14&dq=audism+and+oral+movement&hl=en&sa=X&ved=0ahUKEwi51a-zgsXZAhUlzlkKHdW2DOQQ6AEIJzAA#v=onepage&q=audism%20and%20oral%20movement&f=false Etoppo (talk) 02:43, 27 February 2018 (UTC)

Selena's Peer Review
Hey guys!

Awesome article, I have always wondered why there wasn't a page dedicated to Audism on Wiki. I completely enjoyed reading it. Some suggestions I have for improvement:

1) In the intro, you used the phrase "pathological thinking", which to me sounds slightly biased (a bias I am completely behind), but a bias none the less, and I think if you remove that phrase and have the sentence say "based on an attitude that results in negative stigma... etc" that it would make your article sound more neutral.

2) In the Types of Audism section, the last two paragraphs need some citation.

3) I think a really great section you guys could add to your article would be a section about the effects of Audism of the Deaf community.

Overall this is in an incredible, informative article! You guys have a great base of reliable sources and have provided an enormous amount of information that is well organized. I look forward to seeing the finished product. I hope these comments help.

Selena Selenah (talk) 20:12, 15 March 2018 (UTC)

Anne's Peer Review
I think you have done a really great job eliminating most of the attitudinal bias that is present in the original article. I also think the Audism in Linguistics section is a great addition, and the Audism in Medicine is really relevant today (looking forward to reading it!). Do you have resources that discuss audism in legal settings? From my research on ASL interpretation, the issues in communication that plague the medical field and the legal field are fairly similar, so I wonder if audism might be at work in both; it might be worth incorporating into the medical section or even adding a new section. I also see that you are trying to decide whether to combine the Types of Audism section with the Defining Audism section; personally, I think that might muddy the waters; I think it's much clearer as you have it currently structured. I hope my comments help! Elizabeebe (talk) 13:13, 18 March 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for you feedback! I added a legal system section because of your suggestion and added the cochlear implant debate to the Medical field section. Etoppo (talk) 05:26, 10 April 2018 (UTC)

Emily's Peer Review
The “Defining Audism” section is a great addition/expansion on the original article. You provide Tom Humphrie’s definition, which is very important to acknowledge but try to think about how to define audism in a way that all people can understand—so any person, Deaf or hearing, can maybe place themselves in an audist situation. You give some examples at the end of the first paraphraph of Audist behaviors/thoughts but maybe make explicit that Audism can manifest itself in beliefs/ideas or actions. Many hearingpeople are often unaware of their implicit biases, even if they may not necessarily act in an oppressive way towards Deaf people!

I think I agree (based on your heading) to maybe combine the "Types of Audism" section with "Definition Audism." Or maybe, keep the first paragraph in "Defining Audism" and move the last 2 paragraphs in which you mention specific types to the "Types of Audism" section.

A small note- Audism is not only present in Deaf schools as you note, but also in mainstream classrooms. Deaf children placed in the mainstream setting learn alongside hearing peers and learn through a hearing approach to education. It is rare to find a mainstream classroom that tailors instruction to the needs of the DHH population.

Overall, these are awesome ideas and edits. I see in the top of the sandbox you plan to mention famous audists, I think that is also important. Especially Alexander Graham Bell. Also, maybe mention any first hand recorded accounts of Audist Experiences that Deaf people may have. To truly help everyone understand how Audism manifests itself between the Deaf and hearing worlds. Easmith5 (talk) 23:28, 18 March 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback! I think I might have led you astray with the title of the passage. I changed it from Audism in Deaf Education to Audism in the Education System. Hopefully this is clearer. Etoppo (talk) 05:28, 10 April 2018 (UTC)

Amy's Peer Review
Great work so far! Audism is a great topic and a very important one! A few suggestions:

1) The Intro Blurb and the first paragraph of the Defining Audism section seems a bit repetitive. In the Intro section it is a great section to discuss Tom Humphries, but when you get to the Defining Audism, you might want to explain what audism is in layman's term, for example, you could mention something like, Audism is a form of discrimination towards individuals who are D/deaf and hard of hearing.

2) This is a minor suggestion for the ordering, I would move the last two paragraphs in the Defining Audism that discuss two types of audism to the Types of Audism section.

3) Maybe add a section on how audism can affect DHH individuals in their day-to-day life. For example, in the work place, out in public, etc.. I don't know if this would add bias to the article, but maybe get some comments from DHH individuals on their experience with audism.

AmyTai (talk) 01:19, 20 March 2018 (UTC)

I was thinking about adding a passage of Audism in everyday life of the Deaf Community. Great suggestion! Etoppo (talk) 05:29, 10 April 2018 (UTC)

Response to your peer review:
Thank you for reviewing the lead paragraph of the existing article in Wiki. Please note that the lead paragraph is not my work/draft. Please refer to my sandbox to see the draft to be peer reviewed. Jullian Drews (talk) 18:34, 22 March 2018 (UTC)

Thank you so much for notifying me. I posted my revised edits on your talk page.Etoppo (talk) 18:56, 26 March 2018 (UTC)