User talk:Etrice

Hi Etrice, welcome to Wikipedia. I'm happy to have a look at your draft, as long as you know that I'm just one more volunteer editor here.

There are a couple things I think are worth mentioning. First, it's great that you're coming at this by stating up front that you have a vested interest in the article. People can be sensitive about that, and you've avoided that conflict. However, continuing on that line, you need to understand that it is entirely possible that there is unfavorable information out there (I have no idea, I'm only warning you) about Union Plus, such as lawsuits, or news articles about misrepresentation, or some such thing, and those items may well find their way into the article. You should be prepared for the fact that you won't be able to, and will be actively discouraged from, "defending" the article - as in removing unflattering information. (Beyond making sure that it is true, unflattering information, of course.) See WP:OWN for more detail.

As for the article itself, I would change some wording away from the advertisement type feeling that it now has - but you might find it more interesting just to start the article as it is and see how it progresses/evolves.

Small things: I would condense the title. Something like Union Plus, and note in the opening sentence that it is a benefits program from Union Privilege - a member company of... blah, blah

Let me know when you start the article, and I’ll help if I can with the wiki, categorization, and stuff like that. Cheers.--Bookandcoffee 00:15, 13 June 2007 (UTC)