User talk:Evaneee06152/sandbox

Hkim856 (talk) 14:02, 19 October 2018 (UTC) Well done. I like the way you've improved the previous section, which was quite out of date. Your current draft is almost ready to go, but for the sake of readers, consider adding the existing article to your content (i.e. link the musician's page) so that readers can be easily redirected to other relevant infomation.

One minor concern: there's another student who has also been working on this issue, and I wonder if you two would be interested in collaboration? (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Stlamers/sandbox)

Yuling's Peer Review
Nice article supported by specific data! Any information I want to know is included in your concise writing style which suits Wikipedia perfectly! Good job!HobyHu (talk) 03:07, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Rnforman12 (talk) 17:58, 4 November 2018 (UTC) I think your article has a great coverage of the topic! It is very well researched, and like Yuling said, anything I would want to know about Kpop and Twitter/Youtube is included here. I do have a few comments on some sentences though, as they do come off a bit awkward or unclear. You write, "Then, BTS, the most recent group which succeeded the most overseas" This could be phrased a bit more precise, maybe like "BTS, a recent group with the most overseas success" or something to that nature. Also, I would avoid in your first paragraph of the Twitter section, you say "in conclusion". This implies you're wrapping up an essay/argument, which is not the tone you want to portray in the article.