User talk:Evanm3195

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Peer review #1
Hi Evanm3195, I read your chosen article, Ambient music, and I have some comments and suggestions for you. The lead section is clear and descriptive. The first paragraph gives a solid understanding of the genre's aims, and the rest of the lead explains the genre's genesis and identified its frontrunners as well as its offshoots. I think this section addresses all the necessary points without being too dense. Although it is full of good information and links, the lead lacks some organization with regards to chronology and could benefit from further explanation of the style of the music's sound instead of so much history. The history section is wonderfully expressive and loaded with useful information on the genre's progression. Numerous links connect readers to related pages, allowing for convenient background research, and abundant artist quotes add texture as well as credibility. The many sources used are reliable, and the information is mostly well-cited, except for a couple paragraphs with either no citations or one citation at the end. The following paragraph lacks citation: "As a genre, ambient music usually focuses on creating a mood or atmosphere through synthesizers and timbral qualities. It often lacks the presence of any net composition, beat, or structured melody. Due to its relatively open style, ambient music often takes influences from many other genres, ranging from house, dub, industrial and new age, amongst several others." Also, this source seems less-than-trustworthy, especially for an entire paragraph: Yellow Magic Orchestra at AllMusic. Retrieved 2011-05-25. I also felt like the history section was a bit disorganized chronologically, and it could benefit from subsections organized by decade. Critiques aside, I thought the history section was well-worded and thorough. I think the "1990s developments" section is excellent. The focus on "ambient house" is clear, and the link to the page is there, along with links to artists of that time period. It would be nice to see citations closer to their provided information here. The first two paragraphs have two citations at the end, and it's hard to distinguish which information came from which sources. The "Related and derivative genres" section is also nicely descriptive and boasts many links to related pages. I felt like it is well-organized and succinct while providing all the necessary information. My one critique for this section is that most of the sources come from Allmusic, a self-published website. "Notable ambient-music shows on radio and via satellite" is a good paragraph with good information, but again, it would be nice to see citations next to new information instead of seeing multiple at the end of multiple paragraphs. "See also" section contains plenty of information for further research. Overall, I think this article presents an admirable amount of information with very readable language in a neutral tone. Some reorganization and closer citation could benefit the article, but overall, it's very on-point and informative. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Eviarengo (talk • contribs) 19:03, 13 April 2016 (UTC)