User talk:Evanmgold/sandbox

Article Critique
I think your article could use some development and what you have so far does not deal with ethics, even though the silk road is an ethical issue. I think your addition can be added as an addendum to the trial section and doesn’t merit a separate header. You may need to add a section on ethical implications or add a section on privacy and the jusitifcation for the marketplace’s existence in the operations section. You could also change the direct successors section to “lasting implacations” or Legacy and talk about how it has become a model for other sites with similar ideologies. I think this is an interesting topic, and you’ve just scratched the surface with your current draft Llevan2 (talk) 01:53, 30 March 2017 (UTC)

Instructor Comments
Evan, I agree with the peer review above. While I think it is fine that you followed your interests in the book club and trial, it just seems like there isn't a lot there to talk about, which you must have discovered in the course of your research. And silk road is such a potentially rich subject to discuss ethically! Why are people even drawn to the site? What kinds of issues are raised with the illegal goods sold on the site (including assassinations! drugs! has human trafficking ever been an issue?)? Is there more that you can add?

In your book club sentences, make sure you italicize the titles of books. Other than that, it looks fine. In your section on arrests, I am confused about the statement "may not be directly related" to Silk Road -- I thought the whole point was that they were connected? This needs to be made clearer. Where will you put these sentences specifically? Perhaps the sub-section "Other trials" could be changed to "Other Trials and Arrests" and add the sentences in there?

While there is not specific information on other trials, it has been found that There have been over 130 arrests connected with The Silk Road Market Place,[1] although it is important to note that a lot some of these arrests may not be directly related to The Silk Road Market Place and may not be public information due to legal reasons.

--Jmstew2 (talk) 01:40, 4 April 2017 (UTC)