User talk:Evilmanedwolf/Gary Anderson (designer)

Your edits look pretty nice; my main points of critique are you used "Gary" about 5 or six times in the span of five or six sentences. Switch up the nouns a little bit, use "Anderson" more often than Gary as it reads more formal and diversifies your proper nouns to make the article less monotonous. Starting a sentence or two with "he" or "his" wouldn't be bad either. Also, the placement of your citations feels almost nonsensical; maybe break up the information into two separate paragraphs and only cite at the end of each. Other than that, the actual content you're proposing sounds solid and your sources are great. Oh Im Sunny (talk) 01:11, 19 March 2021 (UTC)Oh Im Sunny