User talk:Evkulesza/sandbox

Hi. It looks like you are finding good information to expand the nectar article. Make sure to double check that those citations are not already used before you post your suggested improvements to the talk page of the article. Lethornton (talk) 22:25, 1 March 2018 (UTC)

It seems that you have looked at a lot of material in thinking about what you want to write, but it is not clear what material you will actually use. You need to transition your conversational tone for planning the article to a more informational tone that shows what information will be included. To meet the requirements of this assignment, you need to get specific examples explained so that you can show how primary research papers inform the general topic you are addressing. Keep working on refining your text by adding structure and make sure to link the citations and add links to other wikipedia articles. Lethornton (talk) 00:45, 17 March 2018 (UTC)

Nectar Peer Review
Hi Evelyn! Your draft on nectaries is presented in a very Wikipedia-esque way- which is off to a good start! I also appreciate all the links to existing sources on Wikipedia.

To start: just to clarify - are you creating a whole new section "Nectary", having one subsection on "Floral Nectaries", and completely eliminating "Septal Nectaries" (because of the similarity between floral and septal)? OR is this all under "Floral Nectaries"? I am a little confused on the organization just because you wrote "Nectary draft" as the section in your sandbox and then just started talking about floral nectaries- unless they are the same thing? If anything, maybe try to stay consistent so that the reader isn't thinking it's two different things.

I think you have a lot of good, straight forward information to help readers learn more about Nectaries; however, with the other sources you have, are going to be expanding on the content you already have in your draft, or are you going to add new info? I think if you find more new info, it would be beneficial to your audience because everything you already have is pretty concrete.

Also, I feel like the information about the nectar spurs came abruptly following the first paragraph, and because you mentioned pollinators in there, you can add this paragraph after the 3rd paragraph about pollinator use of nectaries. You can also think about moving the pollinator sentence out of the first paragraph to the third paragraph because you talk more about it in the third anyway.

Also, although we haven't gotten to the media module yet, and I'm sure you probably already thought of this as well, I think that adding pictures of nectar spurs and nectaries, in general, would help enhance your addition to this article. I think that the language of the content is written well so that is easily readable to the Wikipedia world-nice! There are minimal spelling mistakes (ie. Netaries-->nectaries), but those are easy to fix with proofreading. IKontogiannis (talk) 00:48, 27 March 2018 (UTC)

Hi! I can see your steady improvements to your article. It looks like you have not gotten to 10 scientific papers that you are incorporating, though. As your reviewer said, keep working on expanding the details. I like that you have a lot of links out to other pages. That seems important and is helpful. Be careful to make sure that you are clear about the septal nectaries and distinguish this type. Lists or pictures of the different kinds would be helpful. Lethornton (talk) 01:55, 13 April 2018 (UTC)